Friday Fictioneers: Fire

 

 

 

Fire

 

It was just past 1am. Darren sat by the fire in his back yard. He thought back to the first date he had with his now estranged wife Alice. Rather than take her to a restaurant he had wanted to do something different so he invited her to his back garden where he cooked dinner. They had many meals together here over their five year marriage. Until she met Ethan …

 

Darren placed Ethan’s severed limbs on the fire.

There is still a chance that Alice will take me back now.

He picked up his cell phone and rang Alice.

 

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60 comments on “Friday Fictioneers: Fire

  1. neilmacdon says:

    Well that turned creepy!

  2. Oh! Well, Ethan isn’t a choice anymore, that’s for sure.

  3. plaridel says:

    nice try, but would it work? i doubt it. his reward would be jail time.

  4. Eeeeeeeeeeek.
    Don’t like to cross this guy

  5. That was unexpected. Leg of Ethan anyone? Good write!

  6. draliman says:

    Yeeks! Sooner or later she’s going to notice that everyone she dates mysteriously disappears 🙂

  7. This is dark. Alice has nowhere to turn to, Darren will see to that.

  8. Oooh how sinister. Sounded so fond and romantic at the beginning. I hope Alice doesn’t answer the phone.

  9. Sandra says:

    I hope he’s not inviting her round for a barbecue… 😦

  10. Love how unexpected that was 🙂

  11. Joy Pixley says:

    I have clearly been reading too many grisly resource materials because my first thought was: ugh, that is going to smell so bad, burnt flesh! 😀 How super cool that you wrote a book based on a Friday Fictioneers story. I keep having ideas for books based on mine, but haven’t finished one yet. You give me hope!

  12. subroto says:

    Urp! Looks like he literally roasts the competition. This was deliciously dark,

  13. What started charming, certainly turned dark! Admittedly, it was that much darker because my son’s name is Ethan! 😉

  14. Iain Kelly says:

    Loved the matter-of-fact reveal of such a sordid act! Excellent.

  15. Dear Lisa,

    Doesn’t sound like it’s going to be a pleasant meeting. Dare I say, ‘well done’.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  16. It looks like he’s trying to control fate. Pity if he’s in for frustration if Alice isn’t on board again.
    I liked this one a lot, Lisarey. Nicely done …
    Isadora 😎

  17. Too much for an act of revenge. Red lights blinking for you.
    Well written.

  18. No… not a chance… I already hear the sirens

  19. Maybe he’s not exactly Mr. Right

  20. Laurie Bell says:

    Ah I’m going to go with
    No she wont, pal
    Great short piece

  21. Nobbinmaug says:

    It’s not a scary as missing chocolate when you’re trying to make S’mores, but it’s not bad. No, this is really good. You went from brokenhearted to Dexter in 100 words. That’s impressive. This was a very good, chilling story.

    You wrote a book based on a Friday Fictioneers prompt? I’m going to guess you missed the 100-word mark by a lot.

  22. Tannille says:

    My sort of story! Reminds me of the tv series “You”.

  23. I don’t think she’ll take him back. She probably left him for Ethan because she saw something in him she didn’t like, and she’d be right.

  24. Lynda says:

    Well written and chilling!

  25. granonine says:

    I hope she she has already seen him for what he is. Colder than ice.

    Good twist at the end. Took me by surprise.

  26. Lynn Love says:

    I think he might be misguided on that score. Not many women are attracted by men who hack up their lovers! Creepy writing

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