Friday Fictioneers: Night Out

PHOTO PROMPT © Yvette Prior


Night Out


It was the morning after the night before. Lana and Shannon had been out for a few drinks. As always when drinking the two sisters finished their twenty cigarettes from earlier in the day and got more in the machine. Waking up, heads full of thunder, they made some coffee to bring them back and laughed about the vase of lighters they had amassed over the years when they would forget to bring one. Both planned to quit but both were hooked. Shannon felt Lana had a better chance of doing so as she’d started smoking later. Maybe one day.


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47 comments on “Friday Fictioneers: Night Out

  1. Iain Kelly says:

    A tough habit to kick, but it amazes me that anyone would choose to start smoking these days, given the health risks we all know about. I fear they may be burning themselves out!

  2. Dear Lisa,

    I know it’s a tough habit to kick but I hope the girls will win out. Loved “heads full of thunder.” Nicely done.



  3. I know from my own experience how hard it is to quit – but quit they must! Loved the ‘heads full of thunder’ line.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

  4. ellenbest24 says:

    Nice descriptive piece, you got a lot in to a few words. Addictions i was once told are like habits on speed. Nasty things but there is hope for these two I think.

  5. gahlearner says:

    I think these two will be able to kick the addiction. Chemicals are powerful manipulators though.

  6. James McEwan says:

    Ah, the two social drivers – alcohol and cigarettes – Although it brings then together, I wonder if they may find another hobby to fill the void if they do give up.

  7. yarnspinnerr says:

    Very neat take on this clutter.

  8. pennygadd51 says:

    Well, it’s a tough habit to break, but maybe they’ll manage it. Mind you, if they quit cigarettes they’ll be able to afford twice as much booze!

  9. Well written. Liked ‘vase of lighters’, missed in my take of the prompt.

  10. Alice Audrey says:

    If it’s been a while, “later” wont make much difference.

  11. James McEwan says:

    Let them smoke until they drop, they enjoy the hypocrisy of saying they will give up – it’s a dream goal.

  12. granonine says:

    I’ve never smoked, but I have clients who tell me they’ve never had anything so hard to quit. Nicotine addiction is a real bummer.

  13. draliman says:

    I remember back when I smoked (many years ago now!) I had half-full lighters everywhere!

  14. Jan Morrill says:

    These sisters share so much. I hope they eventually share the courage to begin to live healthier lives, before one of them loses the other. Nicely done!

  15. Nice depiction of two close sisters who do everything together.

  16. Thankfully, I never started 🙂

  17. jillyfunnell says:

    I really like “made coffee to bring them back”.

  18. Dale says:

    They’ll only be able to kick it once they truly decide to.

  19. 4963andypop says:

    Stimulant depressant crash. Stimulant depressant crash. What creatures of habit we all are!

  20. Piyali says:

    I hope they’d quit soon. Nice story, Lisa

  21. There are some good lines in here. Nicely done, Lisa.

  22. Susan says:

    I see these sisters also as enablers, each keeping the addicted. They don’t sound like they are good for each other. Nice story Lisa

  23. Good luck to them giving up, its not easy

  24. I’m sure that one day they’re going to give it up.

    PS: Loved the heads full of thunder part

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