Twenty Years
Patrick made his way up to his home. Wet mud was sticking to his boots. He let himself in, put some logs on the fire, sat down, closed his eyes, let his mind drift …
To twenty years ago when things had been so much different. He remembered holding his boyfriend Aaron in his arms in their bed, stroking his fingers through his hair …
… but then it had turned sour like the bitter taste of stale beer. He found Aaron and his sister Kate in that same bed. He stabbed them to death and that’s how he came to be here.
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Wow, love gone very violently wrong. Nice one!
Thank you for reading Draliman. 🙂
From love to anger and death in such a short number of words. Only obsessional love could make a person do that – so touching and tragic
Thank you for reading Lynn. 🙂
My pleasure
Something he will have to live with for another twenty years and beyond. Excellent!
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Thank you Keith. 🙂
What a tragic tale you’ve written. What a dreadful thing jealousy is!
Thank you for reading Penny. 🙂
Now there’s something to have on your conscience.
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That’s a complicated situation to find yourself in, and a lifetime of regrets. Well written.
Thank you Iain. 🙂
. . . and buried them in the creek so that he could visit their side every day. Creepy!
That would be a great next part. Thanks for reading. 🙂
Dear Lisa,
Double betrayal. Tragic tale.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Wow – I wasn’t expecting that tragic tale of betrayal! Thanks for surprising me.
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Bad enough to find him in bed with someone… worse to be with his own sister!
Well done.
Thank you for reading Dale. 🙂
Such a sharp turn. Well told
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A chilling story capturing a double betrayal. Well done.
Thanks so much. 🙂
Betrayal is bad, coming from his own sister doubly so. Very tragic tale, he’ll have to live with what he’s done. Looks like he’s alone all the time.
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Yikes! What did he do with the bodies? And why is he compelled to stay?
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Ooh, what a love triangle! And tragic ending for all three.
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It’s always the sister or best friend that just can’t keep their hands off your lover. How sad.
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Wow, that was a surprise ending!
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Well, that was a surprise–and what about his sister? How sad.
Thank for reading. 🙂