Friday Fictioneers Writing Prompt: Twenty Years

 

 

 

 

Twenty Years

 

Patrick made his way up to his home. Wet mud was sticking to his boots. He let himself in, put some logs on the fire, sat down, closed his eyes, let his mind drift …

To twenty years ago when things had been so much different. He remembered holding his boyfriend Aaron in his arms in their bed, stroking his fingers through his hair …

… but then it had turned sour like the bitter taste of stale beer. He found Aaron and his sister Kate in that same bed. He stabbed them to death and that’s how he came to be here.

 

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37 comments on “Friday Fictioneers Writing Prompt: Twenty Years

  1. draliman says:

    Wow, love gone very violently wrong. Nice one!

  2. Lynn Love says:

    From love to anger and death in such a short number of words. Only obsessional love could make a person do that – so touching and tragic

  3. Something he will have to live with for another twenty years and beyond. Excellent!

    My FriFic tale is called Solace!

  4. pennygadd51 says:

    What a tragic tale you’ve written. What a dreadful thing jealousy is!

  5. Sandra says:

    Now there’s something to have on your conscience.

  6. Iain Kelly says:

    That’s a complicated situation to find yourself in, and a lifetime of regrets. Well written.

  7. James McEwan says:

    . . . and buried them in the creek so that he could visit their side every day. Creepy!

  8. Dear Lisa,

    Double betrayal. Tragic tale.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  9. Wow – I wasn’t expecting that tragic tale of betrayal! Thanks for surprising me.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

  10. Dale says:

    Bad enough to find him in bed with someone… worse to be with his own sister!
    Well done.

  11. Laurie Bell says:

    Such a sharp turn. Well told

  12. jillyfunnell says:

    A chilling story capturing a double betrayal. Well done.

  13. gahlearner says:

    Betrayal is bad, coming from his own sister doubly so. Very tragic tale, he’ll have to live with what he’s done. Looks like he’s alone all the time.

  14. britlight says:

    Yikes! What did he do with the bodies? And why is he compelled to stay?

  15. Ooh, what a love triangle! And tragic ending for all three.

  16. It’s always the sister or best friend that just can’t keep their hands off your lover. How sad.

  17. Wow, that was a surprise ending!

  18. granonine says:

    Well, that was a surprise–and what about his sister? How sad.

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